2024年高考英语真题（新高考II卷）续写解读分析学案
写作第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料, 根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段, 使之构成一篇完整的短文。I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought.That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car.Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said.Just then I realized that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out.At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”注意：（1）续写词数应为150个左右；（2）请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。 注意: 1. 续写词数应为150个左右；2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news._____________________________Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.______________________（新高考I卷和II卷主观卷部分的作文部分相同，原文译文见I卷译文部分，此处不再重复。为避免解析部分的重复，部分内容作了简化，可参考卷I的解读分析学案。现从网络上找到几篇范文，以饲读者。） 【解析】阅读原文过程中要注意勾画人物的姓名、性别、性格特点、相互关系、故事发展的关键情节，明白需要解决的问题、考虑和推断可能的解决方案，等等。本题所给材料：主人公“我”在旅途中意外耽搁了行程，遇到了热情善良的出租车司机Gunter，根据提示语暗示，在作者无法支付车费和时间紧急的情况下，他们约定四天后再见面时付款。续写部分要注意写出“变化的过程”，比如人物的心理变化的过程、解决问题的方式方法的形成和生效的过程，等等。这个过程就是层次安排的依据。第一段开头语：I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.根据逻辑关系判断，无法取现金，无法付账；公共汽车很快就要发车，“I”不能错过这辆车，所以，两人通过商量取得互信，“I”承诺四天后付款。续写部分就要描写两人如何交流达成协议。第二段开头语：Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. 这一段就应该写见面付款，并表达感谢。升华部分应该是人际交往中的互助和互信。升华要依据故事的亮点、对人物的影响、宣扬积极正面的人生哲理和传递正能量。本文考场上时间宝贵，要有明确的构思和写作方向，注意层次之间的连接，用好连接词。把握好字数。 词汇和表达的使用一定要服务于表达的需要，不要堆砌背诵的现成语料。
【参考范文】范文1I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He was obviously nervous, which made me naturally guess that he was worried about the taxi fare, so I quickly explained my situation and offered to give him something equal to the value of the fare. But Gunter seriously refused and said he could wait for my conference ending and my next return to Vienna. Relieved and touched by his kindness, I quickly put down my phone number for him and asked for his. I boarded the bus and promised to call and pay for the taxi fare.Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He came to meet me and greeted me with his usual big smile. I paid him with a mountain of thanks and offered him a special present which he accepted delightedly. We talked for a moment, during which I sent the praise and regards from my colleagues when they heard of the story and he said that inspired him to continue spreading kindness. After our departure, I still reflected on the whole incident: how a stranger’s kindness spared my trouble and how it built our faith in each other.【参考范文】范文2I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. For a fleeting moment, his face dimmed. “I really need to catch this bus,” I pleaded, quickly explaining the urgency of attending the crucial conference, and promised to pay him back upon my return in four days. Gunter paused, trying to weigh up the situation. Eventually, he grinned at me. “I trust you. Go to catch your bus.” Then we exchanged phone numbers. As the bus was about to set off, I grabbed my bags and dashed toward it, looking back and shouting heartfelt “Thanks.” Through the closing door, I saw Grunter smiling to me. I waved goodbye in response.Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He answered with a cheerful “Hello” on the second ring, his laughter echoing through the phone as he recognized my voice. When we met at the appointed café, I handed him an envelope containing the money I owed, plus the extra to express my gratitude. Gunter only accepted the taxi fare, shrugging off my attempt to insist he take it all. “Did you make it to your conference ” he inquired. I nodded, thanking him again for showing kindness to a stranger. Over time, our paths continued to intersect as we became friends, sharing meals and stories whenever I visited Vienna.【参考范文】范文3I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. I was so embarrassed that I couldn’t look him in the eye. Would he believe me Or would he think I was trying to ditch him without paying To my surprise, he nodded with a calm smile and replied, “Go then.” I thanked him and jotted down his phone number, promising that I would call him on my return trip and pay the fee, to which he agreed without the slightest hesitation. As I hastily boarded the bus, still dazed by the day’s twist of fate, I realized it was Gunter’s unquestioning trust that had saved my day.Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. His first words were: “I’m so glad you called.” I was moved by his honest words, realizing that as normal people, we all have doubts about one another when we first meet, until we come to the point where we make the glorious decision to trust. After paying Gunter the taxi fare, I offered him an extra tip, but he refused. Instead, he told me to call him the next time I was in Vienna and buy him a beer. Sure, I promised, and maybe more beers, now that I have made a true friend in this unforgettable city.【参考范文】范文4I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He looked at me in disbelief, asking me what to do. Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. “If I miss this last bus to Prague, I'll be late for the conference which is so important that I can't afford to miss it.” I explained. “May I have your phone number I will call you and return the money I owe you. I promise I will keep my word or you keep my watch!” I added, handing him my watch as well as my business card. Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch. He wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. "Just keep your promise, Sir." A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure.Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Beaming a warm smile at him, I gave him a big hug the moment I saw him. We chatted happily on the way to the airport. I told him that thanks to his generosity and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the "double car ride", back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down. I had no choice but to give him an attractive souvenir I had bought at Prague, which he accepted with delight. In this way, we became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly. I felt blessed to have such a warm-hearted friend like Gunter who has a heart of gold. 范文1用词177个。在第一段中“我”告诉岗特这个消息，意味着“我”不能付款。双方的反应合乎情理，情节发展自然。而岗特的拒绝也和他在原文表现出的热情、善良相符。记下双方电话号码的情节不仅合情理，也和第二段的“打电话的承诺”衔接紧密。在第二段中，见面付款是约定，表达感激是人之常情，因此“我”的感谢和小礼物顺理成章，而带来其他人的表扬更是感谢和弘扬的一部分。最后升华部分符合故事的情节发展和内涵，弘扬了积极的正能量。从整体上看这篇范文精炼流畅，层次合乎情理，逻辑自然、清晰，句式表达上长短句结合，形式和内容丰富，是一篇24分高分范文。范文2共用词200个。在第一段中，岗特听到这个消息后表情的变化是合理的，而我然后的恳求也符合故事的情节发展。岗特表情的再次变化再次表现出他的热情、善良。然后交换电话号码也和第二段的提示部分连接紧密。如果把第一段最后部分再精简些就更好了。在第二段中，岗特的好心情通过电话表现了出来，然后还钱部分的安排和对话是第二段的主要部分，展示了作者的写作功底。最后两个人成为了朋友，是个温馨的结局。如果在描写还钱和对话的过程中，再控制一下字数就更好了。整体而言，这篇范文把故事的后续表达得很和乎清理，用词有层次性，写出了岗特的情绪变化，情节联想和表达合理，是一篇较好的范文。范文3共用词195个。在第一段中，“我”告诉了岗特这个坏消息后，自己非常尴尬和担心，这个情节安排很自然合理。岗特的应对出乎“我”的意料，让我上公共汽车离开（在这儿如果对岗特的行动做出一些铺垫会更好些）。然后“我”感谢并记下了岗特的电话号码，和第二段的提示连接紧密。登车离开时的感激的心理描写水到渠成。在第二段中，他接到我的电话的反应和我的内心的感慨部分还需要润色一下，逻辑性还应该更强些。给小费部分和最后留下美好印象部分符合故事情景和人物的性格特点。总体上看，这篇范文逻辑清晰，情节合理，是一篇较好的范文。范文4共用词300个。这个篇幅可能会造成答题卡空间的不足。应该把一些详细的描述部分做一些删减和改写。在第一段中，“我”解释了自己的困境并且恳求迟付车费，还要把自己的手表质押给岗特，这些情节流畅自然，逻辑清晰。在第二段中，“我”返程还是坐他的车去机场，这个情节安排和原文形成闭环，非常好。不要小费而接受了纪念品，也呈现了岗特的性格特点。（小费的定语从句最好是非限定性定语从句，或者使用并列连词。） 最后两人成为好朋友是个温馨的结束，再次赞扬了岗特地好品德。总体而言，主要情节和层次体现出了作者的写作能力。
