Unit5 解透单元写作
主题写作—向大自然学习
1.写作任务
假定你是李华，远在美国的笔友 Johnson询问你的暑期内蒙古草原之行。根据下列要点，请你给他回信。
（1）见到了美丽的草原、羊群和蒙古包；
（2）体验了牧民的马上生活；
（3）品奶茶、篝火联欢；
（4）其他。
注意：（1）词数80左右；
（2）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（3）文章的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Johnson,
I am glad to tell you about my journey to Inner Mongolia with my family this summer holiday. _______________________________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
2.写作构思
（1）一审：确定写作体裁和主题
体裁：应用文
主题：回信向朋友讲述暑期内蒙古草原之行
（2）二定：确定时态和人称
时态：一般过去时
人称：第一人称
（3）三明确：明确写作要点
内容要求
a.开篇点题——讲述暑期内蒙古草原之行
b.要点写作
①见到了美丽的草原、羊群和敖包；
②体验了牧民的马上生活；
③品奶茶、篝火联欢
④其他。
c.结束语
词数要求：80左右。
（4）四分段
结合要点分为两个段落。
3.素材整理
（1）关键词语
①与牧民共同进餐 eat with the herdsmen
②玩得高兴 enjoy oneself
③联欢 have a get-together
④感觉有点害怕 feel a little frightened
⑤在回家的路上 on the way back home
⑥感觉自己心跳得厉害 feel one’s heart beating fast
⑦远离假日的人群 escape the holiday crowds
（2）重要句型
①中午的时候，我们和牧民一起在蒙古包进餐，品尝奶茶，玩得很高兴。
At noon, we ate with the herdsmen in the Mongolian yurt, tasting the milk tea and enjoying ourselves.（现在分词短语作伴随状语）
②虽然我们不会说蒙古语，但我们可以感受到跳舞和唱歌给我们带来的快乐和幸福。
Although we couldn’t speak Mongolian, we could feel the pleasure and happiness brought to us while dancing and singing.（这是一个主从复合句，其中从属连词 although引导让步状语从句；另外 bring的过去分词短语作后置定语）
③令人印象深刻的是骑马。
What was impressive was horse riding.（这是一个主从复合句，其中what引导主语从句）
④我在大城市从未体验过这种生活方式。
I had never experienced this lifestyle living in big cities.（现在分词短语作时间状语）
⑤没有什么比远离度假的人群更让人放松的了。
Nothing is more relaxing than escaping the holiday crowds.（比较句式，使用比较级的否定形式表达最高级的肯定意义）
满分作文
Dear Johnson,
I am glad to tell you about my journey to Inner Mongolia with my family this summer holiday. It was the first time that we had watched the vast grassland, sheep and Mongolian yurts in real life. At noon, we ate with the herdsmen in the Mongolian yurt, tasting the milk tea and enjoying ourselves. At night, it was exciting to have a get-together around the camp fire. Although we couldn’t speak Mongolian, we could feel the pleasure and happiness brought to us while dancing and singing. What was impressive was horse riding. In the beginning, I felt a little frightened on the horse. I had never experienced this lifestyle living in big cities. Nothing is more relaxing than escaping the holiday crowds.
Looking forward to your early reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
[亮点点评]
①内容要点简洁全面，结构清晰，分段合理；选用恰当的关联词、衔接词，使文章有条理。
②人称、时态运用恰当。
③高级句式和复杂句表达精准，如现在分词短语作伴随状语，过去分词短语作后置定语以及 although引导让步状语从句，what引导主语从句；还使用了比较句式，使用比较级的否定形式表达最高级的肯定意义，为文章提升了档次。
5.佳作背诵
（1）佳作一
假定你是李华，上周末你的英国朋友Bob想了解“南水北调”工程。请根据下列要点给他写信，告诉他这一情况内容包括:
①人造工程：东中西三线调水；
②目的：解决北方（海河流域）水资源严重短缺问题；
③沿途封闭保护，水源清洁；
④来自长江流域的水源。
注意：①词数80左右；
②可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
③开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Bob,
How is everything going I’m writing to share something about the South-to-North Water Diversion Project. ____________________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
Best wishes.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案：
One possible version:
Dear Bob,
How is everything going I’m writing to share something about the South-to-North Water Diversion Project. The man made project extends from south to north, whose source lies in the Yangtze River area. It goes through many provinces in the North China, which have long been in drought most of the year. Moreover the lack of rainfall adds to the water shortage Thanks to its operation, many people benefit a lot from it, and it works well. Generally speaking, it has three separate lines that is the east, west and central lines. At present, whether in life, agriculture or industry, the fresh clean water is available to us all in the north.
Hoping you can come for a visit in person. Looking for ward to your reply soon.
Best wishes.
Yours,
Li Hua
（2）佳作二
随着经济的发展，越来越多的文化遗产（cultural relic）遭到破坏。假设你是红星高中的学生李华，请你给当地报社写一封信，就以下两个方面谈谈你的看法，来纪念6月10日的“世界文化遗产日（World Cultural Heritage Day）”。
要点：①文化遗产的重要性（见证历史和文化，帮助人们了解过去；稀少，有价值）
②呼吁人们保护文化遗产。
注意：①要涵盖所给要点，词数100左右；
②可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
③开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear Editor,
I am Li Hua, a student from Hongxing High School. ______________________
_____________________________________________________________________
I hope more and more people will become concerned about protecting our cultural relics.
Yours,
Li Hua
答案：
One possible version:
Dear Editor,
I am Li Hua, a student from Hongxing High School. Nowadays, with the development of our society, more and more cultural relics are facing the danger of disappearance. So we must attach importance to this problem and try our best to protect them.
First, cultural relics represent our historic culture, which offer us great opportunities to learn about what happened in the past. Also, they can help us make our traditional culture hand ed down from generation to generation. More importantly most of them have survived for a long time and they are usually very rare and valuable.
For above reasons, with the World Cultural Heritage d coming, we shouldn’t hesitate to call on people to take action to save our treasures.
I hope more and more people will become concerned about protecting our cultural relics.
Yours,
Li Hua
（3）佳作三
假定你是李华，想邀请你的新西兰朋友 Johnson到你们村庄进行生态旅游。请给他写封邮件，内容包括:
①品尝土特产；
②参观无土栽培基地；
③下榻当地民居，体验天然氧吧。
注意：①词数80左右；
②开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。
Dear Johnson,
How are you doing these days Knowing you are fond of traveling outdoors, I am writing to invite you to our village for an eco-travel. ________________________
_____________________________________________________________________
Looking forward to your coming soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
One possible version:
Dear Johnson,
How are you doing these days Knowing you are fond of traveling outdoors, I am writing to invite you to our village for an eco-travel.
Since last year, our village has been attaching importance to the influence and role of the eco-tourism. now it has turned into one of the most beautiful villages nationwide. Here you will be able to taste the local fruit and food that cant have been eaten ever before. More importantly, what attracts you then will be the base where soilless culture is being developed in agriculture. Whats more, you can look for a local house as an ideal place to stay for the night, enjoying the fresh air that cities don’t have. You are sure to have a good time if you come. I would like to be your guide.
Looking forward to your coming soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
