北京市石景山区三年（2020-2022）高三一模分题型分层汇编-05作文
一、邀请信
1．（2022·北京石景山·统考一模）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。2022年4月神舟十三号(Shenzhou-13 manned spaceship)即将返航，你校电视台英文频道向学生征集以“航天”为主题的原创短视频。你打算邀请留学生Jim 一起完成作品。请你给他写邮件，内容包括：
1 .征集要求；
2 .作品初步想法；
3 .询问意向。
注意：1.词数100左右；
2.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
提示词： 神舟十三号：Shenzhou- 13 manned spaceship 航天：aerospace
Dear Jim,
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
二、其他应用文
2．（2020·北京石景山·统考一模）假如你是红星中学高三学生李华，你的美国朋友Jim写了一封信，告诉你他开发了一个App，这个软件可以用来共享衣服，想要征集大家的看法。请你给Jim回信，内容包括：
1. 你的态度;
2. 理由。
注意：1．词数不少于50；
2．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
3．（2021·北京石景山·统考一模）假如你是红星中学高三(1)班学生李华。你的英国笔友Jim对中国的数字化生活很感兴趣，来信询问相关情况。请你给他回邮件，内容包括：
1. 介绍你身边的数字化生活；
2. 阐述你的看法；
3. 询问对方情况。
注意：1. 词数不少于80；
2. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Jim,
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours,
Li Hua
三、图画作文
4．（2020·北京石景山·统考一模）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写一篇英文周记，记述你与同学参与“红十字急救培训”活动的全过程。
注意：词数不少于60。
提示词：救护员证first aider certificate
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
试卷第1页，共3页
试卷第1页，共3页
参考答案：
1．Dear Jim,
To celebrate the return of Shenzhou-13 manned spaceship in April, 2022, I’d like to invite you to create a short video, concerning the honorable moment.
The theme of the innovative video is “aerospace” and the length of the video should be within 10 minutes. I’d love to shoot the video as follows.
First, it includes a brief introduction of the spaceship, as well as the astronauts who’ll have successfully finished the task. Also, the space life can be mentioned as lots of audience may be fond of it. Finally, we will send our best wishes and pay tribute to the heroes.
I wonder if you have any special thoughts about my plan Looking forward to you reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
【导语】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写邮件，邀请留学生Jim一起完成以“航天”为主题的原创短视频作品，写明征集要求，作品初步想法并询问对方的意向。
【详解】1.词汇积累
关于：concerning→with regard to
任务：task→mission
喜欢/感兴趣：be fond of→show interest in
特别的：special→particular
2.句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：The theme of the innovative video is “aerospace” and the length of the video should be within 10 minutes.
拓展句：The theme of the innovative video, the length of which should be within 10 minutes, is “aerospace”.
【点睛】[高分句型1]First, it includes a brief introduction of the spaceship, as well as the astronauts who’ll have successfully finished the task. （运用了who引导的限制性定语从句）
[高分句型2]Also, the space life can be mentioned as lots of audience may be fond of it. （运用了as引导的状语从句）
2．Dear Jim,
I am very glad to know that you have come up with the novel idea. Personally speaking, I am willing to share my clothes on your app as it feels like I am emotionally connecting someone in my clothes. In turn, I also can try others’ new clothes. We can wear different types of clothes without actually spending any money. Anyway, sharing clothes is a creative way to make full use of them and benefits others as well as myself.
Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达是应用文，要求写一封书信。
【详解】第1步：根据提示可知，本文要求写一封回信：假如你是红星中学高三学生李华，你的美国朋友Jim写了一封信，告诉你他开发了一个App，这个软件可以用来共享衣服，想要征集大家的看法。请你给Jim回信，内容包括：1. 你的态度；2. 理由。时态应为一般现在时。
第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如； share（共享），novel（新奇的），emotionally（感情上），connect（联系）， spend（花费），benefit（使受益）及creative（创造性的）等。
第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持卷面的整洁美观。
【点睛】范文语言地道，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级词汇和句式，高级词汇有come up with（想出），personally speaking（就我个人而言），be willing to do(愿意做……)，make full use of（充分利用），as well as（也、和）以及in turn（反过来），而且还使用了状语从句“Personally speaking, I am willing to share my clothes on your app as it feels like I am emotionally connecting someone in my clothes.”，宾语从句“I am very glad to know that you have come up with the novel idea.”，非谓语动词“We can wear different types of clothes without actually spending any money.”及“Anyway, sharing clothes is a creative way to make full use of them and benefits others as well as myself.”，全文没有语法错误，上下句转换自然流畅。
3．Possible version 1:
Dear Jim,
Glad to know you’re interested in the digital life of Chinese, I’d like to tell you something about it around me.
To tell you the truth, I can’t help feeling amazed at the great changes that digital life has brought to us. With a smart phone in hand, I can do almost anything. Just name a few on the list –learning online, getting medical service on the Internet and shopping with a click. I can even travel across China without taking cash!
As a young student, I surely enjoy living in such a digital world. It gives me easy access to abundant resources, news and learning materials alike. If only I wish, it offers the chance to better myself, physically or mentally. However, the digital life also has its downsides. Many elderly Chinese feel left behind, including my grandparents. So I often try to help them keep up.
How about the digital life in your country Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
Possible version 2:
Dear Jim,
Learning that you are interested in the digital life of Chinese, I’d like to tell you something about it around me.
You know, the advanced digital technology has changed our lifestyle fundamentally. To me, I can almost pay everything via a mobile phone, such as transportation, food and entertainment. My city has upgraded services, and we can pay bills online, including electricity, gas, water and heating. We can also enjoy reading from e-libraries, visiting virtual museums and even get medical services online.
I feel the digital life has brought great convenience to us and improved our life and work in a way beyond imagination. If only I wish, I can access abundant resources and better myself academically and physically. However, it does have its downside. The biggest one is the risk of privacy and data leak, which deserves better coping. Another is that many elderly get left behind. I feel the young have a duty to help them keep up.
How about the digital life in your country Looking forward to your reply and your coming to explore our digital world one day.
Yours,
Li Hua
【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求考生给英国笔友Jim写封邮件，向他介绍中国的数字化生活。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：应用文
时态：根据提示，时态主要为一般现在时。
结构：总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说，把支持句作为分说，并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求：
1. 介绍你身边的数字化生活；
2. 阐述你的看法；
3. 询问对方情况。
第二步：列提纲 （重点词组）
be interested in; would like to; To tell sb. the truth; can’t help doing; enjoy doing; access to; leave behind; try to; keep up; how about; look forward to
第三步：连词成句
1. Glad to know you’re interested in the digital life of Chinese, I’d like to tell you something about it around me.
2. To tell you the truth, I can’t help feeling amazed at the great changes that digital life has brought to us.
3. As a young student, I surely enjoy living in such a digital world.
4. Many elderly Chinese feel left behind, including my grandparents.
5. So I often try to help them keep up.
6. How about the digital life in your country
7.Looking forward to your reply.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇（衔接词）（供参考）
1.表文章结构顺序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,
3.表转折对比关系：However, On the contrary, but, Although +clause(从句), In spite of+ n/doing, On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…
4.表因果关系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰。
【点睛】[高分句型1] Glad to know you’re interested in the digital life of Chinese, I’d like to tell you something about it around me.这句话运用了省略连接词that的宾语从句。
[高分句型2] If only I wish, it offers the chance to better myself, physically or mentally. 这句话运用了不定式作定语。
4．Last week, I took part in the Red Cross first aid training.
At the beginning, we assembled in the school hall to listen to the importance and basic steps of first aid. After realizing how important first aid is, we couldn’t wait to learn more. After a short grouping, we were led to a classroom where a trainer demonstrated the detailed procedure. We watched closely as he showed every move. Then came the test for first aid. Although I was nervous, I managed to carry out all the moves taught.
To my excitement, I was issued a first aider certificate. I held the certificate with pride and thought that I could help more people in need with the knowledge of first aid.
【分析】本篇书面表达属于图画作文。要求学生写一篇英文周记，记述你与同学参与“红十字急救培训”活动的全过程。
【详解】第一步：审题
体裁：记叙文。
时态：根据提示，时态应为一般过去时。
结构：总分法。
要求：
1.记述你与同学参与“红十字急救培训”活动的全过程
2.词数不少于60。
第二步：列提纲（重点短语）
took part in；how important first aid is；demonstrated the detailed procedure；managed to carry out all the moves taught.
第三步：连词成句
1.Last week, I took part in the Red Cross first aid training.
2.After realizing how important first aid is, we couldn’t wait to learn more.
3.After a short grouping, we were led to a classroom where a trainer demonstrated the detailed procedure.
4.Although I was nervous, I managed to carry out all the moves taught.
根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步：连句成篇
1.表示文章结构顺序：活动的时间；活动的内容；活动的地点；活动的意义
2. 表示并列补充关系：At the beginning；After；Then；
第五步：润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯。复合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多的高端句式，如全部倒装：Then came the test for first aid.；非谓语动词：After realizing how important first aid is, we couldn’t wait to learn more；宾语从句：I held the certificate with pride and thought that I could help more people in need with the knowledge of first aid等。文章思路清晰，层次分明，上下句转换自然。为文章增色添彩。
答案第1页，共2页
答案第1页，共2页
